Aerial View Maps

What do you think about this?

My Movie Screenplay: Fades in: Day: Position: View of concrete on road, set down. Music plays: A white Mercury/Thunderbird drives past the camera. Front: The car drives toward the camera. Shots of the car driving keep appearing: Inside car: Derrick: Finally, a vacation.. Henry (unnamed): Yeah, seriously. It's about time. Derrick: Do you think we're gonna like it? Henry: If I know the place right, It's going to be awesome.. Position: Back, right: Car drives past. Inside Car: Derrick: Hey, can you hand me the map? Henry: Um.. I think It's in here somewhere (Thinking while saying). Derrick: Well, you better find it, because I don't know where to turn. Henry: Oh, there it is! (Surprised) Henry hands Derrick the map. Henry: Did you find it? Derrick: Yeah, we're almost there. Henry: That was faster than I thought it would be. Derrick: So, who owns the place? Henry: My great grandparents did, until they passed away, so our family just owns it now. We haven't been here in a while.. so I don't know the type of shape It's in. Derrick: Is it even sleepable? Henry: I hope so, it was last time, but It's been so long.. Derrick: There isn't anyone for miles, so It can't be trashed. Henry: I don't know, there used to be people out here.. Derrick: What do you mean "used to be"? Henry: They all moved out, people were randomly killing themselves.. There could be a happy and joyful person, and one day they would just snap, and kill themself. It was so spontanious that no one knew what to think. They thought the area was haunted. Derrick: And why did you think it would be cool to come out here? Henry: I don't believe any of that bullshit. I think they were just tired of their own pathetic lifes and decided to commit suicide. Derrick: What if it is really "haunted". Henry: Dude, seriously. That stuff isn't even real. It's made up shit, just to scare people. Derrick: Yeah, your probably right.. Henry: Are we getting any closer? Derrick: We should be there in about 15 minutes. Henry: Jesus, there isn't anything to do! Derrick: Why didn't you bring anything? Henry: Like what? Derrick: I don't know, an iPod, you could have watched a movie. Henry: Last time I brought expensive things on vacation, I left it! Derrick: Well that's your fault. Henry: Did you bring anything I could use? Derrick: Um.. my iPod should be somewhere in there.. Henry: Oh, yeah.. I see it. Derrick: There isn't much on it. Henry: Wow! Lady Gaga? That's pathetic Derrick.. Derrick: Dude! That wasn't me.. I swear to god my sister put that on there. Henry: Yeah, but that doesn't explain your fruity ass videos.. Derrick: You can blame all that gay stuff on my sister. Henry: Whatever, do YOU have anything on here? Derrick: I told you, not much, but there is SOME stuff. Henry: Wow, the only rap you have is by Eminem. That's pathetic. Derrick: He's awesome, shut up. Henry: I swear to god, you have horrible taste.. Derrick: There should be a movie on there. Henry: What's it called? Derrick: Scarface. Henry: Finally, something we both agree on. Music starts again: Clips of the videos keep showing, aerial views, side views, lower views. Derrick: Henry--HENRY! Headphones are still on. Henry: What?! Derrick: Where do I turn? Henry: Left.. Wow, this looks nothing like I remember.. Derrick: Yeah, this is NOT SLEEPABLE! Henry: I didn't say it was for sure! Derrick: Your sorry ass is just lucky we brought a tent. Henry: I'm sorry, but this is WAY shittier than I remember.. Derrick: It's not HORRIBLE, we just probably shouldn't go in that house. Henry: Why?! Derrick: I don't want to catch anything! Henry: Panzy. Derrick: I'm not going in it. Henry: Than what could we possibly do? Derrick: I don't know, hike? Henry: There might be a creek somewhere around here.. From what I remember. Derrick: Oh, well we could do that to. And I brought my portable DVD player. Henry: Oh, cool. How big is the tent? Derrick: Oooo, not that big... It's not really ment for two people our size. Henry: Well, that sucks. Derrick: Hey, we still have to enjoy this vacation while it lasts. Henry: Yeah, I don't want to go in English with that bitch Mrs. Drake. Derrick: Oh, I know! That is hell! Okay, we better set up the tent. Henry: Yeah, probably. They continue to set up tent... Derrick: Okay, what should we do now? Henry: It's starting to get late, we should probably go in the tent. Derrick: Yeah, but we should watch a movie first, It's not that late. The two get in the tent. Henry: What movie should we watch? Derrick: Let's see, we could watch.. "The Godfather"? Henry: Okay, that sounds good. Shots of Henry and Derrick are shown: Derrick: Wow, that was good!

Public Comments

1. good
2. It's alright for an introduction...just don't drag it on for too much longer.